Criticism of Amuricanism

Critiques:

(The errors that are in the original text are not mine. I directly translated them from the story.)

• There were numerous instances of repetition of words, or cases where a similar word was used. For example, “vision” and “envisioned” within a line of each other, as well as “unoriginal” twice in two lines. This was also an issue with phrases used twice (“I even autograph” on the same line two times).
• “All that I have done has been lies and I feel as though I am not even an arteest any longer.” There really isn’t any huge problem with this sentence, I just think that it would sound better if it were the following: “All that I have been and done has been lies. I feel as though I am no longer an arteest.” I made these changes because I feel that they are two completely different ideas and should not be in the same sentence.
• “ ‘You suck, merdre!’ My eyes turned to look at the accidental missile launch button.” This idea has absolutely no intro. When did this button appear out of nowhere? Perhaps more description or background is necessary in between to explain why Jacques-Luis has this button.
• “Pshhhhhhhhh steam rose out of the missile silo as the nuke head began to erupt out of the silo in the backyard. Pshhhhhhhhhhh, it sounded as the misslle flew yards into the air and as the homing device begun to activate, it flew downwards soaring ever so gracefully to hit it’s mark.” This pair of “sentences” is fraught with errors. I would rewrite it like this: “Pshhhh. Steam rose from the missile as the nuke head began to erupt out of the silo in the backyard. Pshhhh, it continued to sound as the missile flew yards into the air. As the homing device began to activate it flew downwards, soaring ever so gracefully to hit its mark.”
• I have no suggestion for a better ending. The one that is present has nothing at all to do with the story. There is no evidence in this story that such an ending would unfold. I don’t know what to say

I agree with the given moral: that life is too transient a thing to waste upon something that comes to no point. The main character Jacques-Luis (or should I say Owen?) has a revelation to this effect in the second paragraph where he realizes that “everything that [he has] created or that defines [him], is unoriginal.” This continues with the idea that “all that [he has] said and done has been lies” and he begins “wondering how everything that [he has] done could be for nothing.” In this comical and simple story where the character is not very developed, this is of no concern. Sadly this problem can occur in the real world as well. An example of said occurrence might be the midlife crisis, the sudden realization of one’s age and situation. More often than not, this trouble can find you in a very different place than you imagined for yourself when young, throwing you into a fit of worry and a sudden change in lifestyle. The moral: time is short. Don’t waste it.